Friday, October 16, 2009

Time



you were in my dreams
but then i awoke

you knew,
even there,
in my subconscious
our time would go too quickly
time of which we never had
stopped
in our togetherness
relinquishing
the power
subdued
in the name of love
at times mercy
it would never be
tick tock
my heart thumps

so quickly...
forever ends
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33 comments:

  1. PaulaOctober 16, 2009 at 11:26 AM

    Yepp. when forever falls apart. Beautiful and touching and so very true. Can relate once again. BTW I had a real good laugh about my Yoga on crutches. Love across the pond

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  2. glnrozOctober 16, 2009 at 11:34 AM

    I always enjoy the words,,,

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  3. JosephineOctober 16, 2009 at 11:40 AM

    Kay,
    So clost to the heart... Beautiful!!
    -Alex

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  4. Tom BaileyOctober 16, 2009 at 12:46 PM

    The painting matches the words well.

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  5. BernieOctober 16, 2009 at 12:49 PM

    I actually had a dream exactly as you have described, it was after my husband passed and he was in, it was so real and when I awoke my heart was pounding and I threw myself into the pillow and comforter trying to keep his scent with me.....to this day, many years later that dream is so real to me.....I love your poem and your descritptions, absolutely loved it. Have a wonderful day....:-) Hugs

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  6. Aditya KasavarajuOctober 16, 2009 at 12:53 PM

    This poem is like a beautiful sweater woven out of words.

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  7. Brian MillerOctober 16, 2009 at 12:53 PM

    haunting kay...i hate to see forever end. i agree the pic and poem play really well together. have a great weekend!

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  8. AnonymousOctober 16, 2009 at 3:11 PM

    Dreams within Dreams

    They are circles we can revisit over and over again.

    We can re-experience love in all its forms.

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  9. SaadiOctober 16, 2009 at 4:13 PM

    'In my subconscious our time would go too quickly'

    I loved these two lines!!! Great going!

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  10. Lil BitOctober 16, 2009 at 5:49 PM

    This one simply takes my breath away.

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  11. TheChicGeekOctober 16, 2009 at 6:00 PM

    The end and the dreams that haunt us...sometimes the sadness feels unbearable, but then comes a new dream, a new love, a new and better life. The journey from one to the next is the hard part.

    Beautifully written. Your work is always so inspiring, Kay! Thank you again :)

    Have a Beautiful Day!

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  12. Just telling it like it isOctober 16, 2009 at 8:36 PM

    That reminds me of my last boyfriend...but you know it was for the best I really believe that!!! Because know there is Logistic guy and he is so much more loving and fun to be with!!!

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  13. Tabitha BirdOctober 16, 2009 at 8:58 PM

    Oh, so beautiful. :)

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  14. Wine and WordsOctober 17, 2009 at 12:04 AM

    I had a dream a co-worker (yeah, ok, he is mighty fine and prone to flirt) needed comfort and laid his head in my lap as I stroked his hair. Damn if that alarm didn't freakin' end it all. *sigh*

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  15. De'MayOctober 17, 2009 at 1:43 AM

    love it x

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  16. Nevine SultanOctober 17, 2009 at 9:56 AM

    Dreams that end too quickly always leave me with a yucky feeling in my heart. That was very quiet. Nice!

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  17. AnonymousOctober 17, 2009 at 12:57 PM

    Aren't the best, most intense romances live in our dreams? Only to end suddenly without warning leaving us feeling unfulfilled. If only they could transcend into reality. Lovely picture, goes well with your poetry.

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  18. WalkerOctober 17, 2009 at 9:13 PM

    I think the first two lines and the last two sum it all up

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  19. A learnerOctober 18, 2009 at 5:23 AM

    "you were in my dreams,
    but then i awoke"....best art...nice work !!

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  20. AnonymousOctober 18, 2009 at 10:37 PM

    You know, you should respond to your commenters or on their posts. Tit for tat, Roll Tide Roll!!! :)

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  21. AnonymousOctober 19, 2009 at 11:54 AM

    sigh sigh .. such poetry. In the name of love I know some good Lovers we can never be together with forever, but in our hearts they will always remain. sweet memories.

    HUGS

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  22. FabsterrantOctober 19, 2009 at 11:55 AM

    Love in the woods is like sneaking away from a picnic for stollen moments and peaked learning of mutual desires and restless yearning to last a lifetime in reflection but perhaps never to be repeated together again.

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  23. LarryGOctober 19, 2009 at 2:40 PM

    can i have a cup of forever please? :)

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  24. The Write GirlOctober 21, 2009 at 12:14 AM

    Stunning words and I love your concept of time..that painting is powerful as well and draws you into the piece.

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  25. Maude LynnOctober 21, 2009 at 10:16 AM

    I love the last lines. Haunting.

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  26. MargieOctober 21, 2009 at 5:23 PM

    You write so beautifully!

    Margie:)

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  27. ShrutiOctober 22, 2009 at 6:49 AM

    Hey Kay,
    Visit my profile :)
    Something is waiting for you!

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  28. GloriaOctober 22, 2009 at 2:21 PM

    Kay, a wonderful piece of work. The subconscious mind is a miracle processing our thought and desires as we sleep. tick tock,
    my heart thumps, so quickly... forever ends, gave me goosebumps and the illustration . . sublime!

    Thank you so much Kay for your very kind and supportive words you left for me on my blog. Those word hugs mean an awful lot to me right now so thanks for taking the time to do that:)

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  29. NROctober 22, 2009 at 2:45 PM

    That was very well written...a great piece of work!! I liked these line "time of which we never had stopped" thats so true!!

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  30. N JOctober 22, 2009 at 5:17 PM

    Something i'm right now experiencing... well, it will remain in my sub conscience mind forever...

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  31. LenoreNeverM♡reOctober 23, 2009 at 1:44 AM

    so good!
    Time is the essence...
    xo*

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  32. PaulaOctober 27, 2009 at 7:34 AM

    Had to come back to this particular one, Actually I returned several times by now. When forever falls apart. Forever is brief anyway. This poem is helping me on a way I cannot coherent. I am so very grateful for it. Love to you. Paula

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  33. miaNovember 2, 2009 at 11:35 AM

    when forever ends it's tragic...this is
    written so gently, kay.

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