Monday, August 3, 2009

Overlooked

"Cross My Heart
I wish I could Smell
The Tears in Your Eyes
Bring Me Close
Bring Me Into Your Heart"
he whispers...
she looks
through him
past him
searching
aching
longing
to find love
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27 comments:

  1. JosephineAugust 3, 2009 at 12:40 PM

    Kay,
    Beautiful in its simplicity!! I can feel with her,
    -Alex

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  2. BarryAugust 3, 2009 at 1:19 PM

    As with all profoundly simple things this wonderful poem raises so many important life questions. Is she un-open to a love that is right there in front of her? Has he found in her that which she can never find in him? Does she recognize in his beautiful words manipulation instead of love?

    Life and relationships can be achingly complex within their profound simplicity.

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  3. AnonymousAugust 3, 2009 at 2:21 PM

    Very emotional and full of thought.

    CJ xx

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  4. TheChicGeekAugust 3, 2009 at 3:33 PM

    Beautifully moving...I can feel the tears in my heart.
    Lovely, Kay :)

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  5. glnrozAugust 3, 2009 at 3:47 PM

    Not "simple" at all,,

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  6. AnonymousAugust 3, 2009 at 5:04 PM

    These are all really excellent pieces, wonderful ...

    :)

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  7. FireblossomAugust 3, 2009 at 5:38 PM

    I'm wondering if it is significant that nearly all of his words are capitalized. You must have chosen to do that for a reason. Despite his whispering, are his words calculated and overblown? Has he used them before? Is that why she is looking past him for love?

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  8. Brian MillerAugust 4, 2009 at 2:35 AM

    wow. powerful emotions stirred in this piece.

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  9. NainaAugust 4, 2009 at 3:48 AM

    :( :( :(

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  10. MerisiAugust 4, 2009 at 5:04 AM

    Truly beautiful!

    Congratulations on being on David's Post of the Day Awards list!

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  11. indicaspeciesAugust 4, 2009 at 5:45 AM

    This is poignant!
    Reached here from David's Authorblog. Congrats on the mention there.

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  12. ShadowAugust 4, 2009 at 10:19 AM

    how sad. haven't we all felt that at one stage or another...

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  13. LarryGAugust 4, 2009 at 2:43 PM

    ooooh - Kay...
    this tastes of deeper longings

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  14. AnonymousAugust 4, 2009 at 5:39 PM

    Wow, so sad, yet beautiful. The picture is gorgeous, it's so true, all of us have gone through this at least once...
    xoxo,
    Micaela

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  15. WillowAugust 4, 2009 at 10:08 PM

    It breaks my heart to read this.

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  16. Woman in a WindowAugust 4, 2009 at 10:49 PM

    Oh, when there is a he and a she and yet someone is still lonely, that's the worst kind of lonely.

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  17. The Write GirlAugust 4, 2009 at 11:16 PM

    This is beautiful and heartfelt...so many raw emotions are woven in this piece.

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  18. Just Be RealAugust 5, 2009 at 6:27 AM

    Kay, very powerful, sad and touching. Thank you for sharing! Blessings.

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  19. AnonymousAugust 5, 2009 at 8:07 AM

    beautifully written Kay, short and touching.. WONDERFUL

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  20. Saad ShaikhAugust 5, 2009 at 3:22 PM

    that was beautiful..

    some real meaningful lines there.. short yet impacting..

    good one.. :)

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  21. Tess KincaidAugust 5, 2009 at 4:04 PM

    Very poignant piece.

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  22. UnknownAugust 5, 2009 at 5:39 PM

    Oh my goodness. That picture is fantastic and the words are so perfect along side it. Wow.

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  23. NadegeAugust 5, 2009 at 10:15 PM

    this poem is so honest, authentic kay,
    that she hurts.

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  24. My Castle in SpainAugust 6, 2009 at 4:43 AM

    this is such a beautiful little piece..in just few words, you're saying it all, the longing and the hope for love..

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  25. One Prayer GirlAugust 6, 2009 at 7:45 AM

    This reminds me of how lucky I feel to know God brought me together with the man He intended for me. Truly a miracle.

    Thank you always for your comments on my blog.

    PG

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  26. Noelle Dunn.... A Poet in ProgressAugust 6, 2009 at 4:41 PM

    Kay, I love this...it's short but so complex at the same time...it's so open to interpretation - I love that it can mean so many things.

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  27. BernieAugust 7, 2009 at 2:41 AM

    Loved your poem....Not simple at all, very honest and raw...could feel the pain, thank you for sharing and for visiting me and I do hope you drop by soon....:-) Hugs

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