Monday, August 3, 2009

Overlooked

"Cross My Heart
I wish I could Smell
The Tears in Your Eyes
Bring Me Close
Bring Me Into Your Heart"
he whispers...
she looks
through him
past him
searching
aching
longing
to find love

27 comments:

  1. Kay,
    Beautiful in its simplicity!! I can feel with her,
    -Alex

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  2. As with all profoundly simple things this wonderful poem raises so many important life questions. Is she un-open to a love that is right there in front of her? Has he found in her that which she can never find in him? Does she recognize in his beautiful words manipulation instead of love?

    Life and relationships can be achingly complex within their profound simplicity.

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  3. Very emotional and full of thought.

    CJ xx

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  4. Beautifully moving...I can feel the tears in my heart.
    Lovely, Kay :)

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  5. These are all really excellent pieces, wonderful ...

    :)

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  6. I'm wondering if it is significant that nearly all of his words are capitalized. You must have chosen to do that for a reason. Despite his whispering, are his words calculated and overblown? Has he used them before? Is that why she is looking past him for love?

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  7. wow. powerful emotions stirred in this piece.

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  8. Truly beautiful!

    Congratulations on being on David's Post of the Day Awards list!

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  9. This is poignant!
    Reached here from David's Authorblog. Congrats on the mention there.

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  10. how sad. haven't we all felt that at one stage or another...

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  11. ooooh - Kay...
    this tastes of deeper longings

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  12. Wow, so sad, yet beautiful. The picture is gorgeous, it's so true, all of us have gone through this at least once...
    xoxo,
    Micaela

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  13. It breaks my heart to read this.

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  14. Oh, when there is a he and a she and yet someone is still lonely, that's the worst kind of lonely.

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  15. This is beautiful and heartfelt...so many raw emotions are woven in this piece.

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  16. Kay, very powerful, sad and touching. Thank you for sharing! Blessings.

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  17. beautifully written Kay, short and touching.. WONDERFUL

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  18. that was beautiful..

    some real meaningful lines there.. short yet impacting..

    good one.. :)

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  19. Oh my goodness. That picture is fantastic and the words are so perfect along side it. Wow.

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  20. this poem is so honest, authentic kay,
    that she hurts.

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  21. this is such a beautiful little piece..in just few words, you're saying it all, the longing and the hope for love..

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  22. This reminds me of how lucky I feel to know God brought me together with the man He intended for me. Truly a miracle.

    Thank you always for your comments on my blog.

    PG

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  23. Kay, I love this...it's short but so complex at the same time...it's so open to interpretation - I love that it can mean so many things.

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  24. Loved your poem....Not simple at all, very honest and raw...could feel the pain, thank you for sharing and for visiting me and I do hope you drop by soon....:-) Hugs

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